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Sunday, November 20, 2016
TS: Instability in the Middle East's effect on the rise of ISIS
In recent years, the Middle East has been riddled with civil wars, coupes and riots, and because of this instability, terrorist groups such as ISIS have risen and used this as a chance to spread terrorism and fear.
The thesis statement is very good, but the way it is written the connection between what you are identifying as reasons for the rise of terrorism and the efforts of terrorism is not clear.
The "Middle East" may be a bit too vague - identify specific countries that will be addressed in your paper. Will you be addressing groups other than ISIS? If not, specify that you are only looking at ISIS. Also, where is terrorism and fear spreading? Do you have evidence to support this assertion? Finally, check spelling - "coup d'etat."
The thesis statement is very good, but the way it is written the connection between what you are identifying as reasons for the rise of terrorism and the efforts of terrorism is not clear.
ReplyDeleteThe "Middle East" may be a bit too vague - identify specific countries that will be addressed in your paper. Will you be addressing groups other than ISIS? If not, specify that you are only looking at ISIS. Also, where is terrorism and fear spreading? Do you have evidence to support this assertion? Finally, check spelling - "coup d'etat."
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