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Sunday, November 20, 2016
TS: Syrian Civil War
The Civil War in Syria has lead to a collapsing society due to the rise of food prices, rise of strict governmental rules, and psychological factors impacting citizens.
I think that your thesis is very good. However, I believe that it may be a little too specific. You describe the exact factors that influence the collapse of society which you will also address later in your essay, I think that in order to leave the reader with the urge to read your paper you should make your three part thesis a little more general. Otherwise I think that it is good.
Identify the time period under consideration and consider re-wording "psychological factors impacting citizens." Also, didn't the Assad regime rule with a dictatorial hand prior to the emergence of resistance?
I think that your thesis is very good. However, I believe that it may be a little too specific. You describe the exact factors that influence the collapse of society which you will also address later in your essay, I think that in order to leave the reader with the urge to read your paper you should make your three part thesis a little more general. Otherwise I think that it is good.
ReplyDeleteIdentify the time period under consideration and consider re-wording "psychological factors impacting citizens." Also, didn't the Assad regime rule with a dictatorial hand prior to the emergence of resistance?
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